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The chart below compares the number of people per household by percentage in the UK in 1981 and 2001. Summarise the information, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below compares the number of people per household by percentage in the UK in 1981 and 2001. Summarise the information, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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bar chart illustrates changes in the proportion of the number of
people
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 per household in the UK over a 20-year period, starting in 1981.
General
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In general
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,
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a household
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household
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households
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 with 2
people
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consituted
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constituted
 the highest percentage,
while
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person families increased slightly, there were corresponding drops in the proportion for the remaining categories. In both years, houses with 2
people
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 stayed at the highest.
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 1 person household saw an increase from 17% to 26% in 2001, families with 2
people
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 remained the leader, starting at 31% and ending at 34% in 2001. Turning to the downward categories,
houdeholds
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households
 with 3 and 4
people
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 saw the same level of decrease, with their figures dropping from 20%, 18% to 17% and 15% in 2001.
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, by 2001, there were drops of 2% and 4% for 5-person and 6-person households ( 6% and 8%). Notably, the total of 3 and 4
people
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 households in 1981 and in 2001 had a parity of 6%, and
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 was similar with 5 and 6
people
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 families.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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