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The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Abdu

The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Abdu
The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of humans in
India
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 and
China
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 from 2000 and predicts
population
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 growth
to
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by
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 2050.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of human populations of both countries will rise. The quantity of residents in
India
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 is going to be the highest in the
world
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,
while
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China
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people
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 are predicted to be the second most populated area in the
world
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.
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Population
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The population
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 of
India
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 has increased rapidly. In 2000, the
number
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 of humans in
India
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 was 1
billion
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, and it was the 2 most populated in the
world
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,
while
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 in 2050,
India
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 was predicted to be the most populated country in the
world
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 with 1.6
billion
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people
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.
On the other hand
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,
China
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 represents a very different trend. In 2000, the
number
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 of
people
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 in
China
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 was 1.25
billion
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people
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,
and
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apply
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it's
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it is
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 over
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then
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than
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India
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.
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China
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China's
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population
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 will soar steadily until 2030, the
number
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 of
people
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 will be 1.45
billion
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. After that,
a
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number
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 of
people
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 predicted a decrease slowly. In 2050, the
population
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 in
China
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was
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 predicted to be 1.4
billion
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, india, china, population, world, people, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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