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The chart below shows percentages of young people choosing in three ways to solve the global warming in four different countries in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows percentages of young people choosing in three ways to solve the global warming in four different countries in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart demonstrates the percentage of youth from four countries who chose three different ways to address
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global warming during 2008.
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,
people
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 mostly chose to
chage
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change
 their
lifestyles
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 rather than
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 none of the methods.
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, more
people
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 chose the environmental issue
way
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 with the exception of Portugal where obeying government regulations saw a higher proportion. Turning to the two countries where most
people
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 decided to change
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lifestyles
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. For Portugal, 50% of
people
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 there changed
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lifestyles
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, compared to other ways which
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 more than
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double. Meanwhile, Spain residents,
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primarily
change
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changed
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 the
way
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 they
had
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lived
with
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 about 40%,
however
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, for other methods, they were all less than 30%. Moving to the remaining countries which saw
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people
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 changing
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lifestyles
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. In terms of Italy, almost 30% of
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Italians
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 altered the living
way
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,
likewise
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, government regulations
as well as
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 environmental issues were relatively with around 21% with
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people
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 did none of these ways.
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 but not least,
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the Netherlands's
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Netherlands's
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Netherlands
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people
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 saw
about
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just above 20% of
people
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 changing
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 living
way
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, compared to environmental issues
along with
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 government regulations which only accounted for about 20% and under 20%, respectively, with the least
people
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did
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having
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 nothing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, lifestyles, way with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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