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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
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, the
consumption
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 showed an increase over the period,
while
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 the
production
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 experienced a decrease. The
consumption
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 rate was lower than the
production
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 but it surpassed it by the end of the period. In 1982, the number of
consumption
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 started at under 2
million
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barrels
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, and it remained steady until 1990, from there it rose significantly surpassing the
production
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 rate at 3.5
million
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barrels
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 per day , and continued to grow until it reached roughly 6
million
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 in 2006, becoming the higher than the
production
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 ratio.
On the other hand
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, the
production
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 number was slightly higher than the
consumption
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 share. Accounted for,
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more above
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above
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than
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 2
million
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 in 1982,
from
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and from
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 that point onward, the
production
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 share climbed gradually to almost 3
million
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barrels
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 in 1986. It stayed at that point until 1994,
after
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and after
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 that, it went up slightly to around 3.1
million
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barrels
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 in 2006.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, production, million, barrels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil production
  • oil consumption
  • gradual increase
  • surpass
  • overtake
  • reliance on imports
  • disparity
  • steady rise
  • growing gap
  • significant
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