You recently stayed at a hotel during a business trip and were not satisfied with the service. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: explain why you stayed at the hotel describe the problems you experienced say what you want the manager to do

Dear Manager, I am writing
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letter to express my sincere disappointment about the service that
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get at your
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. Please allow me to explain
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Saturday night I was booked a place to rest
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because I really exhausted after finishing my job at my office.
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, I saw the cost is affordable for my finance, so that makes me interested to book your
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. At
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I was really impressed with the design of your
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, it was really impressive, and I was really curious about the service. Unfortunately, the reality is not as beautiful as what
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expected, and the service is worse.
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, I was ordered by the
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to clean my room because it's a little bit smelly, and I waited for 30 minutes for the
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to come to my place and clean it, and I waited until 1 hour, the waiters not coming yet, and I can not stand with the smell so
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decided to clean it by myself.
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, after I cleaned the dirty room, my body was really wet because of my sweat, and I took the AC remote, unfortunately the control its not working at all, and I was really disappointed about
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experience. I believe the manager did know about
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situation,
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, why he does not take some action, and if he does not know I think he should do periodic checks regarding the
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and
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. Thank you for your time and consideration, I hope you can understand my current experience at your place. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Don John

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grammar
Make sure to use correct capitalization at the beginning of sentences and for 'I'.
structure
Try to separate your ideas into clear paragraphs for each point.
tone
Use a more polite tone throughout the letter, especially when mentioning problems.
task achievement
You explained why you stayed at the hotel and described the problems clearly.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, which is good.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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