The two charts below show the percentage of films released and tickets sold by genre, in 1996 and 2000, in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two charts below show the percentage of films released and tickets sold by genre, in 1996 and 2000, in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two charts below show the percentage of films released and tickets sold by genre, in 1996 and 2000, in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the
bars
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chart illustrates the film
lunched
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launched
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and ticket bought and
compare
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compares
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them in 4 different
category
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categories
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( drama, comedy, fantasy
amd
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and
romance) in
an
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european
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European
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country during two different years ( 1996 and 2000), measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it is clear
for
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from
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the graph that in general
moveis
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relasing
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releasing
increased in
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year
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the year
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2000 in
comparsion
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comparison
to
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year
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the year
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1996.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, drama
movies
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were the most
production
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produced
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in
both
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years
while
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,
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apply
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comdy
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comedy
movies
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were the most
attracting
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for
autince
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audience
audiences
.
While
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,
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apply
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drama
movies
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were the most popular in
both
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year
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years
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,
it
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they
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dramaticlly
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dramatically
increased in
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year
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the year
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2000 to 35% compared to 1996. Comedy
movies
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were the second
popular
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most popular
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in
prodution
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production
for
both
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year
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years
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( 20% and 25%)
retrospectivly
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retrospectively
. Only 7% of romance
movies
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produced
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were produced
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in
both
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year
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years
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.
On the other hand
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, above 20% in
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year
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the year
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2000 and 20% in 1996 of tichet selling to comedy
movies
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which is the most attraction.
while
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the least
atracted
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attracted
movies
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in 2000 were romance
film
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films
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, less than 5%
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of ticket
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ticket
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tickets
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sold and in 1996 less than 5% of
fantacy
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fantasy
film
ticket
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tickets
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were sold.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, movies, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of films released
  • tickets sold by genre
  • main features
  • make comparisons
  • trends observed
  • significant changes
  • genre popularity
  • relationship between genres
  • corresponding ticket sales
  • correlations or divergences
  • most popular genres
  • consistent popularity
  • emerged genres
  • marked increases or decreases
  • cinematic preferences
  • consumer demand
  • box office performance
  • film industry impact
  • notable improvements or declines
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