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Band 5.5

Some people support the idea of imposing taxes on fossil fuels (oil, coil and gas) in order to reduce energy consumption. Other people disagree with this approach. Consider the debate and its arguments, and come to your own conclusion.

A group of individuals believe that countries should impose
taxes
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 on fossil
fuels
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 to reduce energy
usages
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 of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score. others dislike
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 attitude.
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oil
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,
gas
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 and coal
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, I think that forcing extra
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 on them could help to overcome environmental problems.
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 with, taxing fossil
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 as
oil
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, coal, and
gas
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 can create a burden on people , especially lower-class families. People in today's world, usually use
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 or
oil
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 for their daily lives
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 as for cooking and for driving respectively.
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, if suddenly
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 are imposed, unlike wealthy individuals, limited-earning holders would face financial difficulties on top of their daily expenses.
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, there was chaos recently in Saudi Arabia among taxi drivers, when the government added
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 on petrol and
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, resulting in a daily earnings drop, and later on, the authority had to withdraw the added
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 to help the low-income groups of people. Despite
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, I strongly believe that taxing them could be beneficial for our environment.
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, environmentalists think that taxation not only helps to reduce energy use
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 assists in decreasing environmental issues. Since the early twentieth century, irresponsible use of
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 and
oil
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 has
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 responsible for air, and water pollution caused by human beings, resulting in most of the ecological problems. So, high
taxes
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 on them could discourage
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them from
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 consuming fossil
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. It is seen in Sweden, as an example, that the country has the best air quality among all other nations after introducing environmentally friendly services and applying huge
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 on some products and services
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 petrol and
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.
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 it is obvious that imposed
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 can be extremely helpful for our weather. In conclusion, it can be summarized that in spite of some difficulties citizens might face, imposing
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 on fossil
fuels
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 would certainly be helpful for our ecology.

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Use topic sentences to guide the reader.
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Strengthen your examples with more details. Explain how they support your main points better.
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Your introduction clearly states your position, which is great for clarity.
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You provide a relevant example from Sweden, showing some awareness of real-world implications.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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