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Some people support the idea of imposing taxes on fossil fuels (oil, coil and gas) in order to reduce energy consumption. Other people disagree with this approach. Consider the debate and its arguments, and come to your own conclusion.

In recent years, the world witnessed a rise in fossil fuel use. In my opinion, forced governmental
taxes
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does
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 not help with
energy
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 conservation. imposing
taxes
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 on
essantial
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essential
 human needs
such
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 as oil and gas can lead to poverty. First of all,
detrimental
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the detrimental
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 impacts of modern
energy
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 resources are undeniable. Since various industrial innovations
requires
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require
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 minimum
energy
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 use, it has been a challenge for most innovators to minimise
energy
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 waste.
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, Tesla is a
lead
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 company in applying clean
energy
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 in
car
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the car
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 industry.
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,
this
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 company faces challenges in
mentaining
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maintaining
 high engine performance.
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, manufacturers do realise the importance of finding a solution, but governmental investment is slowing the process.
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, adding
taxes
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 on fuel, oil and gas will not decrease
energy
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 demand ,rather it will increase poverty.
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, People use
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 sources in cars, mobile phones and electricity. So
this
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 will burden individuals financially decreasing
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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 quality of the country. In conclusion,
taxes
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 are a strong weapon against environmental conflicts.
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 in the other hand, people and factories will face
fonancial
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financial
absticals
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obstacles
 in the absence of alternatives.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your main point in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Try to make the connections between your ideas clearer.
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Include more specific examples and details to support your arguments.
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The essay shows an understanding of both sides of the argument.
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The use of examples like Tesla is a good attempt to support your point.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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