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Today much of the food people ear gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Recently, people
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 their food carried from farms which
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 far from their residents. Since it harms
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the environment
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 and costs much, some people argue that they need to consume foods
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 their local farmers. In
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 essay, I will
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 whether its advantages would outweigh its disadvantages. On the one hand, there are two benefits to
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 the distance of transportation.
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, it decreases the use of energy, because trucks and trains do not need to run so long.
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, the emission of warmhouse gas can be declined.
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, the city can increase the income,
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 the rise
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 consumption of their foods.
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, people use their money for their living place.
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, there are
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 disadvantages. First of all, it depends on the climate , whether vegetables can grow
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.
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, if the weather does not match, it might need an additional cost
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 as energy cost and the cost for a facility. In conclusion, it
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 on the environment of the city, whether the opinion is efficient or not.
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, the government should judge the
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 and needs to create a sustainable society.

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task achievement
Make sure to explain your ideas clearly and fully. Add more details and examples to support your arguments. For instance, you could give specific examples of local foods or describe how local farming benefits the community.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', 'in addition', and 'however' to connect your ideas better. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
task achievement
You clearly stated the topic and your main opinion in the introduction. This gives a good start to your essay.
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You presented both advantages and disadvantages, which shows a balanced view on the topic. This is important for argumentative essays.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon footprint
  • Local economy
  • Supply chain
  • Food security
  • Seasonal products
  • Carbon emissions
  • Sustainable agriculture
  • Nutritional value
  • Farm-to-table
  • Food miles
  • Local produce
  • Community-supported agriculture
  • Ecosystem preservation
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