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The chart below show the percentage of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below show the percentage of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The pie charts provide key information about the percentage of England
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 at one university in the UK who were able to speak additional languages other than English, in the years 2000 and 2010. The unit is measured in percentage
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, it is clear from the charts that the most spoken language in both years was Spanish.
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,
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 the German language shows an increase in the number of speakers, the number of French speakers decreased. As shown from the charts, the percentage of
students
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 speaking German grew from 30 per
cent
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 to 35 per
cent
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,
whereas
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 the rate of those speaking French dropped by 5 per
cent
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. The rate of
students
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 who speak German only remains 10% over the years. In terms of
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 who do not speak another language, the rate declined from 20% to 10%,
while
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 the proportion of
students
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 who know two other languages remained the same at 10 per
cent
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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