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The bar chart gives data about people within 15 minute drive service in an unspecific area in UK and comparing between two areas in urban and rural.

The bar chart gives data about people within 15 minute drive service in an unspecific area in UK and comparing between two areas in urban and rural.
The bar chart illustrates the variation in
number
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a number
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 of
people
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 within 15-minute drive services in a specific region in
UK
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the UK
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 in urban and rural
areas
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that the percentage of
people
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 living in urban regions
remain
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remains
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 constant through all
areas
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,
while
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 citizens in rural places showed a
fluctuating
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 in the average number.
According to
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 what is shown in the figure
that
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apply
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people
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 who
drives
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drive
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 in rural
areas
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 for
the
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apply
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primary school are around 65%,
while
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,
post
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the post
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 office is higher by almost 25%.
Additionally
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, most
people
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rides
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 for the distance given for both doctors and secondary school.
In contrast
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, urban
areas
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 demonstrate 100% of
people
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drives
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drive
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 within 15 minutes for all the regions around 100% person.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • data
  • compare
  • urban
  • rural
  • accessibility
  • services
  • hospital
  • school
  • shop
  • essential
  • residents
  • impact
  • daily life
  • travel
  • routine
  • difference
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