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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data illustrates the amount of usage
on
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of
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 petrol
from
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by
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people
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 in the United States and the United Kingdom.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
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percent
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percentage
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 of
income
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 in
US
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the US
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 fell from the poorest to the richest. In opposite,
people
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 rose from the poorest to the richest. Despite that, the amount of petrol spent by
people
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 in the United States is generally higher than
people
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 in the United Kingdom. Flowing into the country, the
percent
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 of
income
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 in
US
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the US
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 from the poorest to the middle-
income
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 was between just under 4 to just over 5.
Overall
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 showing a
declination
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decline
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of
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in
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the percent
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percent
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per cent
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 of
income
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 from poorest to richest from just under 4 to around 2.
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While in
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In
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 the UK, the
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percent
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percentage
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 of
income
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 from the poorest to the
middle-
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middle
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income
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 was between
around
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apply
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0.5 to approximately 4.
Overall
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 showing a rise
of
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in
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percent
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 of
income
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 from poorest to richest from around 0.5 to approximately 3.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, percent, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • disparities
  • evolved
  • fluctuations
  • stabilization
  • significant gap
  • trends
  • economic conditions
  • vehicular technology
  • public transportation
  • summarise
  • comparison
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