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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year
The two graphics give very different information .The line graph shows the relationship between age and
crime
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 based on the data of the
last
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 year,
while
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 the pie chart shows the different types of
crime
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 in the
Uk
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UK
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 during the
last
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 year. Looking at the first graph
it is clear that
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 young people commit more
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crime
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crimes
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,
infact tha
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in fact the
 highest
percentage
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 of
crime
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 is related to the range of age
that
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apply
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goes from 12 to 28 years old. The pie chart demonstrates that the most common
crime
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 is the violent one ,with a
percentage
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 of 46&,followed by property
crime
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 and drug
crime
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that
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which
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 are mostly in the same amount of
percentage
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. But the
last
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 one is the public order
crime
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 with a
percentage
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 of 9%.In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 the data
showed
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shown
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 by
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this
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these
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 graphs show how crimes are linked to age,and that violent
crime
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 has the highest
percentage
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 ,so
this
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 means that people still use violence as a way to solve conflicts.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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