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The pie charts on the left illustrate the proportion of three electricity-generating sources in the German and French markets in 2009 while the charts on the right further detail the composition of the segment of renewable energy in that same year.

The pie charts on the left illustrate the proportion of three electricity-generating sources in the German and French markets in 2009 while the charts on the right further detail the composition of the segment of renewable energy in that same year.
The graph on the left
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 the percentage of three electricity-generating sources in the German and French markets in 2009
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 the chart on the right
further
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detail
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 the composition of the segment of renewable energy in the same year.
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, the proportion of conventional thermal occupied the most in
Germany
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German
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 electricity generation
by
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in
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 2009. The rate of nuclear occupied the most in
France
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France's
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eletricity
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electricity
 generation in 2009. In Germany, the conventional thermal occupied nearly 60%
in
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of
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 all types. Followed by nuclear, it occupied 23%. The rest of 17.4
rarte
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rate
 was renewables. The rest of
17.4
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the 17.4
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 rate was renewables. The
renewavles
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renewables
 included Biomass, hydroelectric, solar, wind and geothermal. There occupied 39.3%, 17.7%, 6.1%, 36.9%, 0%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • electricity-generating sources
  • markets
  • renewable energy
  • composition
  • nuclear energy
  • fossil fuels
  • generate electricity
  • comprise
  • contrast
  • double
  • compare
  • utilize
  • segment
  • dependency
  • significant differences
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