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The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
The pie chart depicts the share of industry, agriculture and domestic purposes in the
consumption
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 of
water
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 in 6 areas of the world including
north
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North
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America
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, south
America
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,
Europe
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, Africa, central
Asia
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 and
south east
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Asia
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.
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, the majority of the areas
use
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water
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 mostly for their agriculture except for
north
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America
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 and
Europe
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 in which the industries consume the most. In all parts of the world, the least amount of
water
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consumption
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 belongs to domestic purposes. The share of agriculture in the
consumption
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 of
water
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 in central
Asia
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, Africa,
south east
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southeast
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Asia
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 and
south
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South
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America
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 is 88%, 84%, 81% and 71% respectively.
This
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 figure is almost half of
south
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South
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America
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 for
north
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America
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 and
Europe
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. The portion of industrial and domestic
use
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 in the
consumption
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 of
water
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 is more or less similar in Asian countries, ranging from 5% to 12%
while
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, in
north
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America
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 and
Europe
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, the former is roughly twice as big as the former (50% and 15% in that order). In
south
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South
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America
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, the share of domestic
use
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 in the
consumption
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 of
water
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 is two times bigger than that of industrial
use
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 (19% and 10% in that order).

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