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The bar chart gives information about the life expectancy in Japan Korea, the United States and Indonesia and the table shows the change in life expectancy between 1953 and 2008

The bar chart gives information about the life expectancy in Japan Korea, the United States and Indonesia and the table shows the change in life expectancy between 1953 and 2008
The bar chart portrays the
life
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expectancy
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 of the individuals recorded in 2008 the rising expected
years
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 of
life
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 from 1953 to 2008 are elucidated in the table.
Overall
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, it is manifested that Japanese people were expected to live more than others. The average increase in
life
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expectancy
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 was
least
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the least
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 in
USA
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the USA
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. As per the table, the estimated
years
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 of living in Japan were between 75 to 80
years
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 of age in Korea. As per survey data. The mean age of people was 78
years
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 in 2008. The Americans were recorded to be alive for 76
years
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. The age
expectancy
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 of citizens of Indonesia was relatively lower than other countries which accounted
to
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for
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 72
years
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. Turning to the table, the increased use of
expectancy
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 of
life
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 in
USA
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the USA
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, but three
years
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 which is followed by Japan by 3.5
years
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 rise in living
years
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. In Korea. The
life
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expectancy
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years
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 rose to 12.5
years
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 from 1953 to 2008.
The
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A
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 major surge
of
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in
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 expected living
years
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 was observed in Indonesia (15.7
years
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)
due to
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improve
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improved
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the
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apply
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living conditions.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, expectancy, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • increase
  • decrease
  • country
  • data
  • change
  • years
  • population
  • health
  • improvement
  • trend
  • highest
  • lowest
  • average
  • chart
  • table
  • information
  • compare
  • significant
  • steady
  • approximately
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