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The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial sectors - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial sectors - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
conterbution
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contribution
 of three sectors
int
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in
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 the United Kingdom in the twentieth century from 1900 to 2000 in percentage. The sector is categorised
to
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into
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 three:
agriculture
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, manufacturing, business and financial.
Overall
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, the
manfuceruing
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manoeuvring
 and
agriculture
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 showed feel over
period
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the period
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,
agriculture
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is
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fluctuated in
declined
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.
In contrast
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, business and
financial is
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finances
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 rose by the end of the period. In 1900,
agriculture
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 and
manfacturing
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manufacturing
 were 48% and 45% respectively,
then
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 declined gradually in 1975 to
be
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10% and 35% respectively. Business and financial
are
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started at 5 and contributed to
increase
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the increase
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 to reach the summit at 35% in 2000.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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