The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
illustrates
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electricity generated between two countries
Germany
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and
France
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from all
sourse
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sources
and renewables
on
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2009.
To begin
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, electricity generation in
Germany
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on
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was 560 billion KWH , wishes
it
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highster
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higher
than
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France
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in France
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.
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, the conventional
on
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Germany
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was 59.6% compared to
France
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it
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eqaul
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equal
10.3
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% . another type
nuclear
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of nuclear
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it was 23%
on
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Germany
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,
however
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, in
Franse
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France
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it
increase
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to 76%. on the renewables
on
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Germany
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was the biggest point
39.3
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at 39.3
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%
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on Frane 8.1%. same as wind
Germny
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Germany
has a 36.9% and
France
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80.5%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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