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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Marital Status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Marital Status of the populations of Canada and Australia.
Air
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pollution
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 has always been a topic of debate with some arguing that improvements in public
transport
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 by
government
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-funded projects and reducing ticket prices would significantly contribute to reducing
transport
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pollution
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.I strongly agree with the statement as
this
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 incentive provides long-term benefits to the
government
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such
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 as it
limites
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limits
 the usage of private vehicles and improving infrastructure and efficiency. The main reason why I believe that
that
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the
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government
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 should invest in public
transport
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 systems and reduce ticket prices is because it will make the Buses/trains more affordable than private cars.
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, in cities like Vienna, heavy subsidized public
transport
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 led to a decrease in car use. Fewer vehicles on the road means reduced traffic congestion and lower emissions which ultimately leads to cleaner
air
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 and less noise
pollution
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. Another reason why I support the notion is because it improves efficiency.Investment in clean and liable buses, electric trains and
the
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apply
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metro systems will lead to better infrastructure and
reduces
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reduce
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 reliance on fossil fuels.
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, electric bus fleets in cities in China and Japan.
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, a better
transport
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 system provides long-term benefits because it reduces
air
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pollution
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. Reduction in
air
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pollution
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 means lower healthcare costs and environmental damage. In Conclusion,
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 financial investment in
public
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the public
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transport
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 system is costly, its long-term benefits outweigh its expenses.
Government
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 funding and cheaper fares are among the most effective solutions in combating
transport
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-related
pollution
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.
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, in order to maximize results, the
government
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 should move forward with supportive measures like launching awareness campaigns and cycling infrastructure for cleaner and sustainable cities.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, transport, government with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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