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Writing Samples
Band 5

Your local newspaper published an advertisement asking people to offer time for local environmental initiatives in your area. Write a letter to the project manager to offer your help. In your letter: Describe a local volunteer project that you are passionate about Explain what you would like to do to help Suggest how to gather more support for the cause You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I have seen your advertisement
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local
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 newspaper about environmental practices going on in our area. I am really keen to participate in
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 initiatives to protect our surroundings.
Last
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 week, I saw teenagers
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collecting plastic waste from the streets for proper disposal management. They are students who are utilizing their vacation. After watching their dedication
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 a clean and green aura,
i
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have decided to help them. One of my cousins is an influencer, she can help us to promote
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 program through her page. Despite
, i
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 am a website designer,
i
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 will make different posters to attract more people
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 our waste management system.
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, it will
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 help these students to get
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 from local individuals to develop their good work around other cities as well. I hope
this
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 small step can make a big change. I will give my full support for
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 and upcoming
environmental
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 friendly practices. Your's Sincerely Reena

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that introduces the main idea.
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Use more varied linking words to connect your ideas better.
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Check for grammar and spelling to improve the overall quality of your letter.
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Make sure your closing feels polite and professional.
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You express a strong desire to help, which is great for showing enthusiasm.
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You provide a specific example of a local project, which adds interest to your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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