Traffic congestion and housing problems in larger cities could be solved by moving large industries and factories and their employees to the rural areas. What extent do you agree or disagree ?

Over population

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has been the major

problem

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causing traffic

jam

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jams

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and

accomodation

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accommodation

issue

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in developed

contries

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countries

. To eradicate

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problem

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, it

is encourage

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is encouraged

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to relocate big companies and

organisation

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organisations

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with their staffs to less populated areas.

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essay will discuss the positive and negative

effect

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effects

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this

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opinion and strongly

supported

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the idea.

Firstly

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, the big cities

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overcrowding

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problem

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problems

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because most industries are situated in urban

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area

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areas

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Nigerian

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the Nigerian

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Bewery

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Brewery

Company located in Ibadan the capital of Oyo State, Nigeria,

this

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factory is a large company, producing soft drinks like Coke and Malt.

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company

had create

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more job

opportunity

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opportunities

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for people, over 5000

staffs

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staff

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are working there and

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has

leads

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to more traffic congestion around the

area

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because many of the employees are driving their personal

car

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cars

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this

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problem

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could have been solved if the industry is located in

less

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populated place.

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housing

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problem

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greatly

affect

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the

individual

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individuals

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living in town because the higher the demand the higher the price, in a society where there is job availability, the house rent around that

area

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will be expensive.

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, in Riyadh the capital of Saudi Arabia, the

accomodation

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accommodation

bill in Riyadh is huge

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large

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a large

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number of industries in the

area

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. Moreso,

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has increased the

internal

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generated revenue of the state. In conclusion, road congestion and

accomodation

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accommodation

issues in urban

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area

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areas

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could have been minimised if big companies are

sited

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situated

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apply

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rural

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area

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areas

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. It is recommended that the organisation should provide staff

quaters

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quarters

to make life better for their employees.

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Task Achievement

Your introduction gives a clear overview of the topic, but it can be more specific about what you will discuss. You should state your main argument clearly about whether you agree or disagree with the statement.

Coherence and Cohesion

Make sure each paragraph has a clear main point and is linked to your overall argument. Use linking words such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In addition' to guide the reader through your ideas.

Language Use

Check for grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, as these can distract from your ideas. For example, 'accomodation' should be spelled 'accommodation'.

Task Achievement

You provided specific examples from different countries, which helps support your points. Good job on providing relevant examples!

Task Achievement

Your essay addressed both positive and negative effects, which is a strong approach to discussing the topic.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

260 words

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