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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say where you think you left the papers explain why they are so important tell the manager what you want him/her to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to bring your attention
a
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rather unfortunate happening
of
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 some paramount documents, which I forgot at your hotel named
as
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Golden Hotel
last
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 week. I remember that I left my file of papers in your cafeteria
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 enjoying coffee after attending
meeting
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a meeting
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 with my clients. It is
of
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blue
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in color
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color
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 and heavy as well. These all papers
plays
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 a part and parcel role in my business, as
it
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they
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contained
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contain
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a
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numerous essential certificates of my job experience
,
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 and some contract letters
with
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from
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 different buyers of Multinational Companies. I hope you understand my concerns as you are
also
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practicing
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practising
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 as a
manger
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manager
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 in
this
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 hotel. I kindly beseech your assistance in resolving
this
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 problem promptly. I believe that you will ask your all cafeteria employees to find
this
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, and will take all necessary actions to help me. If you need any more details or want to share some positive news about
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, please do not hesitate to contact me at my phone number which is 6476749210. I will eagerly wait for your response. Kind Regards, Harpreet Kaur

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task achievement
The introduction is clear, but make sure to use 'to bring to your attention' instead of 'to bring your attention.'
coherence and cohesion
The letter would benefit from clearer paragraph structure. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. For example, state where the papers were left in one paragraph, why they are important in another, and what you need from the manager in a separate paragraph.
task achievement
Consider using more direct language when asking for help. Instead of saying 'I kindly beseech your assistance,' you could say, 'I would appreciate your help in finding my papers.' This sounds more natural.
tone
The letter has a polite tone, which is important when writing to someone for help.
task achievement
You clearly stated the importance of the papers, which shows good task completion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Sir/Madam,
  • I am writing to inform you that I believe I left some important papers at your hotel.
  • To the best of my recollection, I left the papers in the conference room.
  • These papers are of utmost importance as they contain confidential business information.
  • I kindly request that you or your staff check the conference room and securely send the papers to my address.
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