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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph shows how global
water
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 use by three different sectors, namely agriculture, industrial, and domestic from 1900 to 2000,
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 the table compares information about the consumption of
water
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 in
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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 in the year 2000.
Overall
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, the striking information that can be drawn from the graphs is that the agriculture sector used the most
water
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 over a century, with
Brazil
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 consuming more
water
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 than
Congo
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 in 2000.  In 1900, agriculture used
water
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 at around 500 km3,
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 it grew dramatically over the years and reached a peak at 3000 km3 in 2000. Industrial and domestic
water
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 use started at almost the same level (100 km3) and remained stable for 50 years. In 1960,
water
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 utilised by industrial rose steadily until it reached its peak at 1500 km3 in 2000.
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, domestic use stayed consistent until 1980 before climbing minimally to just below 500 km3 in 2000.  In 2000,
Brazil
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 had a larger population than
Congo
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, 176 million and 5.2 million, respectively.
Brazil
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’s irrigated land consumed the biggest amount of
water
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, 26,500 km3,
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Congo
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 used only 100 km3.
Congo
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 had less
water
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 consumed per person at 8 m3 compared to
Brazil
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, which used around 359 m3 of
water
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 per person.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, brazil, congo, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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