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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
goods
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 and
food
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 bought from stores in three European
nations
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in
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over
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 a decade.
Overall
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,
food
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 consumption and need for
goods
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was
Verb problem
apply
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increased clearly in all three countries,
while
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country
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 1
has
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had
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highest
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the highest
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increased
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increase
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 in both
goods
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 and
food
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 demand compared to 1998. Other
nations
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 have
also
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 gained their
sell
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sales
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 from
year
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apply
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1998 to 2008,
while
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country
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 3 has very little demand and
sell
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sells
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from
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to
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 others.
To begin
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 with, the people who bought
food
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is gained
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increased
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 in all three
nations
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,
while
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country
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 1 has raised by 40% of
food
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sell
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sales
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 and
country
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 2 has just around 5% of gain.
conutry
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Country
 3 has
very
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a very
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 small
increased
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increase
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 and
bought
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a bought
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 percentage with below 10% to just above 10% till
end
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the end
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 of the period.
Furthermore
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,
percentage
Correct article usage
the percentage
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 of
goods
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 bought
are
Verb problem
has
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also
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raised
Verb problem
risen
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 significantly
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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 less than
food
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.
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country
Fix capitalization
Country
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 1 has
notable
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notably
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 increased with around
60
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a 60
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%
bought
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buy
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 rate.
Other
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The other
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 two
nations
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has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 very little increased rate compared to
country
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 1, as they are
claimbed
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claimed
 by just around 10% and finished the period with nearly 50% and 20% for
country
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 2.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, food, nations, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just around" was used 2 times.
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