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the graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

the graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph compares the amount of
wind
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energy
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 produced in four countries –
India
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,
Denmark
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, Germany, and the United States – over two decades, from 1985 to 2000.
Overall
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,
Denmark
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 demonstrated a remarkable surge in
wind
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energy
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 generation, becoming the dominant producer by 2000. Germany
also
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 showed significant growth later in the
period
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,
while
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India
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 and the US experienced more modest increases. At the start of the
period
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 in 1985,
wind
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energy
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 generation was minimal in all four nations.
Denmark
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 began a steep upward trajectory around 1990, rising from approximately 200
megawatts
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 to reach a peak of about 1600
megawatts
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 by 2000, far surpassing the others. Germany started from almost zero but showed substantial growth after 1995, ending the
period
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 at around 800
megawatts
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.
India
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 and the United States exhibited much slower growth rates. The US started at roughly 300
megawatts
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 in 1985 and climbed gradually to reach about 600
megawatts
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 by 2000.
India
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 began lower, at around 50
megawatts
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, and increased steadily to approximately 400
megawatts
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 by the end of the
period
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.
Consequently
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Denmark
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 emerged as the clear leader in
wind
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energy
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 generation by the year 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words wind, energy, india, denmark, period, megawatts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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