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The chart shows the percentage of household expenditure on goods and services in a country from 1995 to 2005.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of household expenditure on goods and services in a country from 1995 to 2005.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart above shows the
percentage
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 of household budget on goods,
foods
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food
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, clothing and
medicine
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 in
china
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China
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 from 1995 to 2011.
In
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On
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this
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page
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page,
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 I will summarise the information by looking at the provided data.
Overall
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, the food
are
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is
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 the highest
percentage
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 among all,
whereas
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 the
medicine
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 records the lowest
percentage
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. To be more detailed, the food
percentage
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 in 1995
shows
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was
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 68%,
while
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 in 20011
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it were
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were
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was
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at
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apply
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59%.
In
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contrast
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contrast,
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medicine
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were
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was
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 4% in 1995,
whereas
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 in 2011 the
medicine
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increase
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increased
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 to 11%. On
other
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the other
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 hand, the household goods
was
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were
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 between 9% and 12% in
years
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the years
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 between 1995 and 2011.
Finally
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, the clothing where
likewise
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according to
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 the graph
19
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, 19
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% and 18%,
in
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from
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 1995 to 2011.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, medicine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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