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The chart shows the percentage of household expenditure on goods and services in a country from 1995 to 2005.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of household expenditure on goods and services in a country from 1995 to 2005.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart
provide
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provides
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a
Correct article usage
apply
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mian informtion
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main information
 about the expenditure of
household
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households
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 in China , the units are measured in
percentags
Correct your spelling
percentages
. In
general
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general,
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 it is clear from the graph that the food
have
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has
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 the biggest amount of expenditure in both years
,
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;
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moreover
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moreover,
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 the clothing
neraly
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generally
have
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has
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 the same
percent
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percentage
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 between the
year
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years
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 1995 and 2011 ,
wherse
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whereas
 the medicine has been
increesing
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increasing
.
According to
Linking Words
 what is shown ,
in
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on
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one
Correct article usage
the one
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hand
Punctuation problem
hand,
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 the
houseshold hsa
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household had
 four per cent and the lowest in 1995 ,
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and in
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in
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on
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 the other hand
in
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, in
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 2011
become
Wrong verb form
became
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 the third place. In terms of food , the percentage
hsa
Correct your spelling
has
 been changed between the two years , there is a drop
by
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of
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 9
percent
Use the right word
per cent
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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