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The chart shows the percentage of household expenditure on goods and services in a country from 1995 to 2005.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of household expenditure on goods and services in a country from 1995 to 2005.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart depicts
proportion
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the proportion
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 of domestic
expense
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expenses
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 on
service
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services
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 and goods in China
from
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over
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 the decade.
Overall
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, the highest spent of Chinese people was on medicine and the second highest expense was on clothing, with
lowest
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the lowest
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 spent on
food
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which
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, which
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is
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apply
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incresed
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increased
than
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from
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 1995 to 2005. In 1995, people
was
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were
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 spending
huge
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a huge
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 amount on medicine in China
with
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, with
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 68% of
money
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the money
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and
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, and
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 they were spending very little on
food
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with
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, with
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 4% money. In
China
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China,
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 they were spending 19% of
money
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their money
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 on
food
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,
was
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which was
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a
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the
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 second highest spend.
Furthermore
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, in 2005, they spent 9% less on medicine,
while
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 the proportion of
hosehold
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household
 goods
was
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apply
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remained
same
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the same
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 in
a
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apply
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both years
with
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, with
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 9% and 12%. They
also
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 improved their spend on
food
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 from 4% to 11%, and
slight
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slightly
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 decreased
in
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on
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 clothes
with
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by
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 1 per cent.
genrally
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Generally
, the use of
food
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 and
hosehold
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household
 goods
usage
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apply
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was increased in 2005.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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