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The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates the percentage of
students
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 attending
among
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four
secoundary
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secondary
school
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schools
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 over the decade.
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, the
students
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increased significantly for community
schools
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,
while
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number
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the number
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 of
students
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are
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decreased in other
schools
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 compared to 2000.
wheres
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,
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 the specialist
schools
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has
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very
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 nominal decline in percentage over the decade. In 2000, community
school
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schools
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 and specialist
schools
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has
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had
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 12%
students
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which
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, which
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 is
lowest
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the lowest
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,
while
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 voluntary-controlled
schools
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have
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had
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highest
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the highest
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amount
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number
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 of pupils
with
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, with
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 52%. In 2005, voluntary-controlled
schools
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has
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had
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 38% and specialist
schools
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 with 11% which is less compared to before,
where
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when
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 other
schools
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 gained the proportion.
Furthermore
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, in 2009, there was a huge climb for community
schools
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 with 58%, where other
schools
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was
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were
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 facing
issue
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issues
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 with
decline
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a decline
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 in
students
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.
Where the
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 highest drop can be seen in voluntary-controlled
schools
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, with
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with
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 52% in 2000 to 20% in 2009.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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