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The picture below show the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison where relative around 150 words

The diagram illustrates the process of recycling
wasted
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waste
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glass
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bottles
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 through three main stages
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 collection, processing, and redistribution.
Overall
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, the process is circular, beginning with the collection of used
bottles
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 and ending with their reuse as new bottled products for sale. A notable feature is the combination of recycled and new
glass
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 during production. In the first stage, wasted
glass
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bottles
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 are gathered at collection points and transported to a recycling plant. There, they are sorted by
color
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colour
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 — brown, green, and clear — and cleaned with high-pressure water to remove dirt.
Next,
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the
bottles
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 are crushed into pieces, melted in a furnace at 600°C to 800°C, and turned into liquid
glass
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.
This
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 liquid is either fully recycled or mixed with new
glass
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 before being shaped into new
bottles
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.
Finally
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, the
bottles
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 are filled, packaged, and delivered to supermarkets for sale, completing the cycle.

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Task Response
Add a brief introduction that outlines the purpose of the diagram clearly.
Task Response
Make sure to give a clear overview at the beginning, perhaps mentioning all main stages of the process.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use linking words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to clearly connect stages of the process.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include a brief conclusion that summarizes the key point of recycling glass.
Task Achievement
The description is clear and follows the recycling process step-by-step.
Task Achievement
Good use of details like temperature range during melting, which shows understanding of the process.

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