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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
the
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 line graph depicts
chinese
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Chinese
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 oil
production
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 and
consumption
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 for about 24
year
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years
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. It is clear from the graph that the two lines start from the same point and
compeletly
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completely
went
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to
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on
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a
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apply
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defferent
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different
 paths.
According to
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 what is shown,
production
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 was slightly above
consumption
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 in 1982.
Also
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, in 86s had a gradual
increasing
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 to 3
million
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 oil
producton
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production
. Meanwhile,
consumption
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 numbers remained steady until
1990
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1990,
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 to 1994 jumped rapidly to almost 3,6.
Moreover
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, get a
muderate
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moderate
increasing tell
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increase
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 the 2006
about
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to
reache
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reaching
 its peak
more
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of more
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 than 6
million
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 oil
consumption
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. Not only that, but
also
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production
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the production
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 line remained under four
millions
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million
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 from 1994 to 2006.
To sum up
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, we could say that both
consumption
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 and
production
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 lines almost
in
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1994 hit three
million
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 but the orange one had slow changes
no
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of no
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 more than half
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million
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a million
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.
On the contrary
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, the blue line
get
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gets
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dubled
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doubled
 from three
millions
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million
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 to 6
millions
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million
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 just in 12 years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil production
  • oil consumption
  • gradual increase
  • surpass
  • overtake
  • reliance on imports
  • disparity
  • steady rise
  • growing gap
  • significant
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