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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that a number of university
students
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 prefer to study other
subjects
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 alongside
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their main degree.
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 it is
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 held belief that
students
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 should focus only on their main qualification to succeed, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that learning other
subjects
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 can be more useful as long as it
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 not affect the main studies.
To begin
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 with, learning more
subjects
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 can help
students
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 to be more flexible and knowledgeable.
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 they can gain skills from different areas, which may benefit them in their careers later on.
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, studying more topics can make
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university life more exciting. For
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example
, an engineering
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students
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 who studies business may learn how to start their own company. Another point to consider, focusing only on one subject allows
students
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 to
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 more experts in their field. It is
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 possible to say that dividing attention between many
subjects
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 can reduce the quality of learning.
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,
students
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 in tough majors
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 as law or medicine often have
limted
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limited
 time so they must be focused on their major.
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, a medical student who studies art courses might feel stressed and fall behind in important
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. In conclusion, despite people having
differen
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different
 views, I believe that it is better to have a balance.
Students
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 should focus mainly on their major, but
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 explore other areas
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 as art if they have time and interest.
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students
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 should have one major
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 as medicine or law,
due to
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 the fact that these
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 are harder
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than
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 others.

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general
Make sure to check spelling and grammar errors (e.g., 'dose' should be 'does', 'examble' should be 'example'). This helps your clarity.
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Try to develop your ideas more thoroughly, providing clear explanations for each point to improve effectiveness.
structure
Ensure that your paragraphs are well-structured with clear topic sentences that relate directly to the main argument.
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You present a balanced view by discussing both perspectives on the topic.
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The conclusion summarizes your opinion well and gives a clear stance.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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