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Band 5

You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter -advising them of your situation. -explain how this is affecting you. -request a new card.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my concern about my identification
card
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 that
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I
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i have
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I
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 lost yesterday. I am a student in an agricultural program
in
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at
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this
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 college. Yesterday, I was doing some research on a project in
library
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the library
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.
As
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An
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 ID
card
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 is mandatory to get access
in
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to
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 the student learning
center
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centre
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.
While
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i
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I
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 was studying there, I forgot my
card
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 on the table.
However
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, when
i
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I
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 realised it,
i
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I
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 immediately came back to get my
card
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, but it was not there. Eventually, I am struggling without my
card
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. My exams are starting from next week
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 without an ID
card
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, I cannot take
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this
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the
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 exam.
Moreover
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, for
study
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the study
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,
i
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I
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 cannot use research centres without it I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could provide me
a
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with a
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new
card
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. I can come to your office at any time for
further
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 details. I promise, I will keep my
card
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 safe from next time. Looking forward to your response. Your's sincerely, Ash

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task achievement
Try to provide a clear introduction stating the purpose of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure there are clear transitions between your ideas for better flow.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling, particularly for the word 'I'.
task achievement
You clearly explained the problem with your ID card.
task achievement
Your request for a new card was polite and direct.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • lost
  • student identification card
  • problems
  • access
  • services
  • libraries
  • events
  • affected
  • classes
  • pay
  • meals
  • request
  • issue
  • documents
  • procedures
  • process
  • situation
  • difficulties
  • important
  • need
  • new card
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