The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The process
depict
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depicts
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the stages and items used in the
cement
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-making process and how
cement
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is utilised to produce concrete for construction.
Overall
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, the
cement
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production
divided
Verb problem
is divided
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into eight steps to manufacture.
While
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,
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apply
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the concrete production
include
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includes
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five stages with obvious percentages. On the one hand, both limestone and clay are mixed together and
send
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sent
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to
grind
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be ground
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. After that, all of them are mixed.
Then
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, the mixture
create
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creates
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powder. Followed
this
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, the powder is rotated heater. After being
heat
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heated
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, the grinder is crushed
it
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apply
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perfectly and
then
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,
manufactured
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the manufactured
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cement
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add
Wrong verb form
is added
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to bags.
On the other hand
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,
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firstly
Punctuation problem
firstly,
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15%
cement
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and 10% water are poured
to
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into
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the special container. After adding
,
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apply
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25% sand and 50% tiny stones are added
simultaneusly
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simultaneously
.
The
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In the
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final
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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stage, all ingredients are blended to
origin
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original
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concrete.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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