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the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The data
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 a study about the
poproutine
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routine
in
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 consuming coffee And tea in
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 Sydney
Melbourne
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, Melbourne
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, Brisbane ,
Adelaide
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 and Hobart.
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, it seems like going to a cafe is the most popular in all cities except
Adelaide
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buying
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 an instant coffee is slightly common there.
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, buying
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freshly
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 beans is the least likely
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 all five
of
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them
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. Visiting a coffee
.
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shop.
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shop
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 is the
favorite
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 in Melbourne.Buy a 64% and so is Hobart.
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sydney
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 has a 61% ,
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Adelaide
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it
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has just over a 45%.
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newly roasted beans may not be as trendy.It got a few numbers in Melbourne, with a 43% ,44% in Sydney, and the
least
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 proportions in Brisbane and
Adelaide
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with
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 only
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33%-34%. Meanwhile
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 a powdered copy is the second most residents with the ratio of 53% ,50% , 46% and under 50% and 55% respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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