The pie chart illustrates the average household expenditures by five different categories in Japan and Malysia

The pie chart illustrates the average household expenditures by five different categories in

Japan

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and

Malysia

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Malaysia

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, other goods and services were the largest

sector

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the most occupied expenditure in Malaysia was housing and health care was the least occupied

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in both countries. In

Japan

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, other goods and services accounted

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largest segment by 29%. Housing and transport expenditures were approximately the same proportion

around

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20%.

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, food accumulated 24% and health care was the least

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exactly

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4%. In

Malysia

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Malaysia

, the largest household

expenditures

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expenditure

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housing

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is housing

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and

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it was around 34%. followed by

good

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goods

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and services were 26%

lesser

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than

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Japan

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expenditure by 4%.

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, transport experienced

same

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pattern, and it was less by 10%. Food accounted

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for 27

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from

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the expenditure.

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, health care was the least

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Malysia

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Malaysia

around

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3% same as

Japan

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Jul 12, 2025

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The pie chart illustrates the average household expenditures by five different categories in Japan and Malysia

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