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The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graph beside shows the
absence
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 of
workers
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 with
illness
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at
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in
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 5
Europian
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European
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 countries based on
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percentage
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the percentage
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 over 10
years
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. All the countries seem to grow in
percent
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per cent
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 except France and
Germany
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 over 10
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years
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10-year
period
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.
The
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apply
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Germany
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 seems to have the lowest
percentage
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 of
workers
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 with
illness
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absence
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. In 1991, France had the highest
percentage
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 of
workers
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 with
illness
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absence
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 at 5%.
This
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number
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 rose steadily and fell
down
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apply
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gradually over 10
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years
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10-year
period
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then
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, then
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 remained flat.
Netherlands
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The Netherlands
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 in 1991
have
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had
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 a smaller
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number
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apply
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of
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percentage of
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percentage
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at
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apply
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4.6%. The
number
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 rose and
drop down
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dropped
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 steadily over the
period
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 from 1991-1996.
Then
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 it increased gradually over 6
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years
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6-year
period
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 from 1996 to 2001. Sweden
have
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had
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 a smaller
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number of
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apply
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percentage
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 of
workers
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 with
illness
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absence
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 in 1991 at 3%. It fluctuated over 5
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years
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5-year
period
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 from 1991-
1995
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1995,
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then
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 it gradually rose steadily and reached 4.7%
at
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in
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 2001. In
1991
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1991,
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Germany
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 had the lowest
percentage
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 of
workers
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 with
illness
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absence
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 at 1.5%. It fluctuated around 1.5% over 10
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years
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10-year
period
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 from 1991 to 2001
and
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, and
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 the same applied to
UK
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the UK
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with
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, with
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the
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a
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 start of 2.5% in 1991 and
fluctuate
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fluctuating
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 around 2.3% over 10
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years
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10-year
period
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.. The lowest
percentage
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 of
workers
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 with
illness
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absence
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at
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, at
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 1.5% in
2001
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2001,
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 is in
Germany
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words absence, workers, illness, percentage, years, germany, period, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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