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The three pie charts give the details of transition of expenditure collected by local government in Someland each year in terms of 6 important categories over the period in question.

The three pie charts give the details of transition of expenditure collected by local government in Someland each year in terms of 6 important categories over the period in question.
The
provaided
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provided
 pie charts,
analyzing
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analysing
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 the information
here
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here,
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reveals
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reveal
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 a lot of points. Of transition of expenditure collected by
local
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the local
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 government in Someland. It is surprising to notice that there is a sharp rise in 1990 of higher education here, a reader can see that there is similarity between k-12 education and health and Human Resources in 1990 and the lowest one in 2000 it is the other and he has 1% percentage and the highest on in 2000 is higher education He is the highest in all the years it is clearly can see that there slow decrease in 2000 as the period shows.
To sum up
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 , if we hold a comparison dealing with
shows
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the shows
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 of transition of expenditure collected by local government in
Someland
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Someland,
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 we can conclude that there is a big difference between them.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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