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The line graph shows the rise in the homeless people across UK from 2010 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the rise in the homeless people across UK from 2010 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the total increase in individuals who left
thier
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their
 homes across three different regions
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 England, London and
Rest
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 of England
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 the time period from 2010 to 2016. The y-axis shows the number of people
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while
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x-axis
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the x-axis
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 represents the years.
According to
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 the chart,
In
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 the beginning,
amount
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the number
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 of individuals was about 1600, but with the passage of time there is
the
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 rapid upsurge was observed
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 is around 4200. After 2014, the growth in the number of homeless individuals continued but at a slower rate, suggesting that some measures might have been implemented to address the situation. By 2016, the total number of homeless people had nearly doubled compared to 2010, highlighting a significant social issue in the UK.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rise
  • increase
  • number
  • homeless
  • people
  • period
  • year
  • compared
  • total
  • suggest
  • social issue
  • significant
  • measures
  • economic
  • crisis
  • low
  • steep
  • growth
  • address
  • situation
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