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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart displays data on
science
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the science
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 qualifications of
people
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 in Malaysia and
Singapore
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.
It is clear that
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 the majority of
people
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 don't have qualifications in science
and
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, and
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 the higher the science qualification is, the fewer
people
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 attain it. In
Malaysis
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Malaysia
, the percentage of
people
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 having no qualifications is around 65%, higher than 60% in
Singapore
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. The proportion is still 5% higher than
Singapore
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's 30% in school leaving exams.
However
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, the percentage of
people
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 having
bachelor's
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a bachelor's
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 degree in Malaysia is approximately 10%, dramatically lower than in
Singapore
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, with a gap of 10%. As for the master's degree,
people
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 in
Malaysis
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Malaysia
 and
Singapore
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 both have roughly 4%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, singapore with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • information
  • comparison
  • science qualifications
  • people
  • countries
  • percent
  • degree
  • diploma
  • certificate
  • trend
  • significant
  • similarities
  • differences
  • percentage
  • higher-level
  • lower-level
  • notable
  • pattern
  • education system
  • findings
  • summary
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