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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the rates of British
people
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 giving money to poor
people
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 by age range for the years 1990 and 2010 .
Overall
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, it
can
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 clear that
people
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who's
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 between 18 to 20 had the lowest numbers over the years ,
while
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people
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by
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aged
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ages
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 36-50 had the highest numbers.
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, the bar chart shows increased charity in 1990
by
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among
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people
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by
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aged
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ages
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 from 18 to 50 . But it decreased
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the
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apply
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people
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by
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aged
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ages
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from
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51 to above 65 . In 1990, the
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ages
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 18-25
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 almost 17%,
while
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people
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by
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aged
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ages
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 36-50 had around 45%
.followed
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followed
with
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people by
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by people
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ages
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 36-50 by almost 39% in 2010 .
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,
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by
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aged
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ages
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 51-65 had 35% in 2010.
the
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 same numbers with
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 were
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 above 65 .
People
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by
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aged
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ages
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 26-35 had
lower
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a lower
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 number in 2010 than
1990
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in 1990
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 by almost 7%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, ages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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