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The line graph shows the percentage of tourists who visited different attractions from 1980 to 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of tourists who visited different attractions from 1980 to 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph shows the proportion of
tourists
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 who visit four different attractions in Scotland, from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, all figures experienced different trends during the time period.
While
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 the percentage of
tourists
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 who visit the
castle
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 and zoo increased, visiting the aquarium and the festival decreased. As the graph shows, in 1980, going to the zoo was common , with 30% of people choosing
this
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 activity.
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, it experienced a slight decrease from 30% to about 20% in 2010.In 1980, 20% of
tourists
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 preferred to visit an aquarium.
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 figure
initially
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 experienced an increase , but
then
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 it declined to 20% again in 1990.
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, it rose from 20% to 23% in 1995, but continued to drop to 10% by 2010.
In contrast
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, going to the
castle
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 was not popular
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 only 25% of
tourists
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 went to the
castle
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 in 1980, followed by an increase to 45% in 1995.
Then
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 the percentage of
tourists
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 dropped to 35 by 2010.Despite of decline, visiting the
castle
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 was most preferred in 2010.10% of
tourists
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 went to festivals in 1980.
This
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 figure experienced fluctuations between 1980 and 2000.
Then
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 it rose significantly from 10% to 25%

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, castle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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