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The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides key data about the
women
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 working in the Labour Force and the ones who work as managers in different countries. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
women
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 working as managers in Australia
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 had the largest ratio.
In addition
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, in the US and Japan, were nearly equal
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women
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 in the Labour Force,
whereas
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 the least in Egypt.
According to
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 what is shown,
women
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 in management had the highest counts 43% in Australia and the US.
On the other hand
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, the least figures 9% in Sri Lanka, and second least , nearly 12% in Egypt,
then
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 17% of
women
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 worked as managers in Japan. In terms of girls in the workforce, Japan had 48% compared to Sri Lanka , which was 42%.
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, a huge number of
women
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 48% in the United States, and the fifth in Egypt, increased to 42% in Australia.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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