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Band 5.5

You are a university student living in on-campus accommodation. You are having some problems with the Internet connection in your room. Write to the supervisor of your residence, in your letter: ● Introduce yourself ● Inform him/her of the situation ● Request that the problem be fixed

Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the internet services, which are being provided here in the student's
accomodation
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accommodation
. I am a
first year
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 student of Computer
Sciences
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, living in room number 493. I have recently shifted to
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 hostel and prior to
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 I was living outside in a private
accomodation
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accommodation
. Currently, I am having a few issues with the internet service.
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, it
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 not
in
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 working order for the
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one
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week.
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, if it is working
either
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 the browsing speed is very less or it is not working at all.
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, I am unable to finish my projects in a given
time-frame
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, which could harm my final results.
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, I urge you to look into the matter
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 and ask the service provider to resolve it as soon as possible. It would be very kind of you if you could ask the
in- house
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 technician to come and check the Wi-Fi modem and cables. In order to
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 ameliorate the problem. I hope you will look into
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 matter. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

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task response
Make sure to clearly state your request in the introduction. This will help the reader understand the main point right away.
coherence
Try to divide some ideas into separate paragraphs. This makes it easier to read and understand.
coherence
Use transitions like 'firstly,' 'secondly,' and 'finally' to guide the reader through your points clearly.
positive
Your tone is polite and respectful, which is great for this kind of letter.
positive
You clearly explained your problem with the internet service, which helps the reader understand the urgency.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • supervisor
  • residence
  • accommodation
  • connectivity
  • intermittent
  • outages
  • assignments
  • research resources
  • impact
  • appreciation
  • prompt action
  • technician
  • investigate
  • resolution
  • progress
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