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The table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different regions in a European country between 2004 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparison where relevant.

The table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different regions in a European country between 2004 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparison where relevant.
The table illustrates the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 in different countries in Europe from 2004 to 2009. The figures are measured in percentages , indicating various changes in all countries.
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, the
number
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 of
cinemas
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exhibit
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 a distinct trend over the period. The highest place with
cinemas
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 percentage
change
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 is the area near the city centre,
whereas
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 country side the countryside accounts to be the lowest proportion.
To begin
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 with, in 2004 the city centre accounted to have the largest
number
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 of 1,512
cinemas
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 before increasing to 1,620 in 2009 with a proportion of 7.14% growth.
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 Suburb had only 4o of it in 2004 and declined in 2009 , reaching 30
cinemas
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, a fall in noticed in the percentage
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 , which was 25% negative. Meanwhile, the Countryside has the lowest
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 , 16.67% with only 108
cinemas
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 in 2004 , and it experienced a slight decline in 2009 , reaching 90.The total
number
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 in all regions was 2,1oo in 2004,
then
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 it began to increase until 2009 , reaching 2,287, with a
change
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 of 8.9$.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cinemas, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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