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Band 4.5

Some people believe that visitors to other country should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

There has been a colossal upsurge in the debate that a few masses think that forgiens should obey the local rules and behaviour,
in contrast
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 other folks argue that local
country
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 should greet the visitors,
this
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 essay will discuss in both view as for i am concerned i am favour of letter view, i am going to elobrate
this
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 essay to support my views. To commence with,
forergines
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foreigners
 should follow the other
country
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 local culture and traditions.To explain it,
when ever
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whenever
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the
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apply
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other
people
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 come to visit
other
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another
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country
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then
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 they have to learn
their
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about their
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 traditions and cultures
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, because
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because of
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so
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 that they will not hurt their feelings
to
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about
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a
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apply
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certain things.
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,
i
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I
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 saw the news on the local television that a person was from
austraila
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Australia
 and he came to visit
india
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India
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, and he did not know that in
india
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India
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 the cow is a holy mother to some
people
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 and he was asking
beef
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for beef
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 to eat
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 of chicken ,
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 there was a
hindu
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Hindu
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 person
so
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, so
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 the
forergin peron
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foreign person
 hurt his feelings badly. Shifting towards a final view,
host
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the host
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country
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 should welcome
multicultre
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multicultural
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people
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people,
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then
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 they can make a different society so every person in that
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socity
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society
 can
exchage
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exchange
 their
laguage
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language
 and tradition so they can make a
harmonius
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harmonious society
socity
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.
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for
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For
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example
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example,
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 in
INDIA
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INDIA,
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 there is a city called Jaipur where we can see
hindu
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Hindu
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,
punjabi
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Punjabi
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,
canadian
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Canadian
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,
brtish
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British
 and so on .THOSE
People
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 share their culture and food so
peolpe
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people
 can explore wisely.
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,
host
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the host
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country
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 should make a
multicultre
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multicultural society
socity
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 so
people
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 can explore and they know what is good or bad in their
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socity
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society
.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly introduce your main idea in the introduction. Avoid grammatical errors to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases to connect your ideas smoothly. This helps the reader to follow your points better.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid spelling errors by checking your work. For example, 'forgiens' should be 'foreigners' and 'elobrate' should be 'elaborate'.
task achievement
You express your opinion clearly and support it with examples, which helps to engage the reader.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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