The graph (figure 2) show the percentage of men and women employed in executive positions in ACME Oil Company from July 1993 to June 1994. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the graph.

The graph (figure 2) show the percentage of men and women employed in executive positions in ACME Oil Company from July 1993 to June 1994. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the graph.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph (figure 2) show the percentage of men and women employed in executive positions in ACME Oil Company from July 1993 to June 1994. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the graph.
The bar chart illustrates the
precentage
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percentage
of
employees
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apply
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male and female
in
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employees in
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ACME
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the ACME
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oil
company
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from
july
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July
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1993 to
june
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June
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1994
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, workers in
ACME
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the ACME
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oil
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company
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company's
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mens
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men's
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ranks inreases
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inreases
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increased
rapidly to the highest Grade A officer
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, conversly
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conversly
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while
the women slightly declined from officer E to officer grade A.
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,in officers grade D and C
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girls and boys remain constant
on
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approxmiately
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approximately
45
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.
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, the
comapny
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company
start
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a
prfessional
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professional
start with the women
the
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the opposite
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happened
with the
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company
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company's
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probabilities.
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,the
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graph
demonstrate
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a
typically
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cross shape of the
precentage
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percentage
of the employees of men and women in the
company
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words company with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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