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The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows weekly consumption of
milk
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 and
butter
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 by four different
age
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 groups in a European country. The data includes the amount and type
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of full
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full fat
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full-fat
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 or
low
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low-fat
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fat
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products
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 of both products.
Overall
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, older
people
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 tend to consume more
milk
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 and
butter
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 than younger
people
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.
In addition
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, the preference for
low fat
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low-fat
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 products increases with
age
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, especially for
milk
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.
People
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 under 25 drink the least amount of
milk
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, with 1200 ml per week,
while
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 the highest
milk
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 consumption is among
people
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 aged 65 and over, at 1900 ml. Full-fat
milk
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 is most popular among the youngest
group
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 59%, but only 30% of
people
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 over 65 drink it.
In contrast
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, only 41% of the youngest
group
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 choose low-fat
milk
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, compared to 70% in the oldest
group
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. For
butter
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, the 45–64
group
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 consumes the most, at 60 grams weekly,
while
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 the under-25
group
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 consumes just 12 grams. The percentage of
people
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 using low-fat
butter
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 is higher in the 26–44
group
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 62% than in any other
age
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group
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. The youngest
group
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 prefers full-fat
butter
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 60%, but
this
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 number decreases with
age
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. In conclusion, older
people
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 consume more dairy products and are more likely to choose low-fat options, especially in
milk
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, butter, age, people, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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