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The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie
chart
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 provides key information about the proportion of
males
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 and
females
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 imprisoned in the United Kingdom between 2015 and 2020.
Additionally
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, the bar
chart
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 illustrates the main reasons for arrest among
both
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 genders. Percentages are used in
both
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 charts.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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males
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 are imprisoned at a much higher rate than
females
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.
Also
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, the most common reason for arrest for
both
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 men and women is public intoxication,
while
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 the least common reasons differ slightly by gender.
According to
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 the pie
chart
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, 32% of
males
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 were imprisoned during the given period,
while
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 the remaining 68% were not.
In contrast
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, less than a quarter of
females
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 were arrested, indicating a significantly lower imprisonment rate among women. In terms of the bar
chart
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, public intoxication is the leading cause of arrest for
both
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 genders, with over 30% of women and almost 40% of men affected. Among
males
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, the second most common reason is drinking and driving (just above 20%),
whereas
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females
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 show a notable percentage in assault (close to 20%). The least common crime among men is theft, at around 13%,
while
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 for
females
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 it is breaking and entering, at just over 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, males, females, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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