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Band 5.5

You are applying for a job. As well as attaching a CV, you need to write a cover letter explaining your reasons for choosing this particular job at this particular company, and why you would be a good hire. Things to include are: – Possible qualifications or reasons for you to be hired – Your energy and enthusiasm for the job – Your past experience in a similar position.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that I am keenly interested in the
position
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 of Quality Assurance Manager in your
company
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.
To begin
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 with, I have a degree in Food Science and a diploma in Quality Assurance and Management from Conestoga College. Provided that
,
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 I
met
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you
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company
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's qualification criteria, I feel that I will be a good fit for
this
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position
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.
Furthermore
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, I am an exemplary person
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 who is a great leader
as well as
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wonderful
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a wonderful
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 team member. I excel at various skills. I have sound knowledge of
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Microsoft
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 and other computer applications.
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, I have even
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 the Health Canada audit twice following the internal audit every six months. In terms of professional experience, I have been working in
food
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the food
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 industry
from
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for
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last
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the last
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 three years.
Firstly
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, I worked as a Quality Technician for one and
half
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a half
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year
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.
Thereafter
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, I got promoted to the
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 of manager in the same
company
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. All the skills
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 which are required for the manager level
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 can
found
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be found
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 within me.  The detailed information regarding educational background and experience is provided in the attached resume. If given a chance, I will do my best to become
a
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an
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assest
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asset
 for the
company
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. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Simranpreet Kaur

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly express your main points and include more examples to support your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas and make the letter flow better.
Task Achievement
You have shown your qualifications clearly and provided relevant experience.
Coherence and Cohesion
The closing is polite and professional.
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